The story is about a young Native American man’s life with
drugs. The story follows him from the time he is fourteen and ends when he is
twenty-one. The other central characters are his friend Randy, his father, and
his grandfather. There are three central events. The first is the meth incident
in the bathroom that estranges Randy and Fresco. The second is Fresco’s
grandfather’s death, which spurs Fresco’s father to force Fresco to get a job
and go to college. The third is Fresco’s reunion with Randy and their heist at
the casino.
I liked the
relationship between Fresco and Randy—the beginning started to set up a strong
camaraderie that I thought would be nearly unbreakable. However, on page five,
Fresco completely betrays Randy (though Randy never finds out) and the two are
separated until page eleven. I feel like the important moments happen when the
boys are together, and therefore I was disappointed when Randy left the story.
Perhaps consider cutting a lot of the middle and keeping the two of them
together throughout the piece.
Also, I
feel like Randy may be the more interesting character. After all, he’s the one
who gives Fresco his nickname and comes up with the idea to try meth, whereas
Fresco does nothing but smoke when Randy’s not around. Then only after Randy
returns does Fresco manage to rob the casino. Therefore, I feel like Randy is
the leader in this duo. Overall, I’d like to see some more development in these
two characters and their relationship with one another.
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